(Released: September 25, 2011)
From the Cover:
It Starts With Choice! What would you choose: love or irrefutable duty?
On the brink of Civil War, the Torrian Alliance continues with its mission to obliterate Star-children across the universe in order to suppress an intergalactic evil. Following the recommendations of his Council, King Gregorio Derry has agreed to send his only son on a mission to restore honor to his family. Bounty Hunter Prince William Derry has crossed thousands of light-years to planet Earth in order to fulfill this age old prophetic practice.
The quiet days of Madisonburg, Tennessee are officially over as Sydney Elaine now knows the full meaning of the phrase 'Be careful what you wish for' when she is confronted by this strange visitor. As an unforeseeable event delays his assassination, William decides to study his target more closely and begins to form a 'connection' with Sydney that challenges his inner being. But this conflict is the least of his problems, as a conspiracy back on his home planet Fabricius threatens the lives of those he loves and his father's royal legacy.
Along with that, he must unravel a hidden menace on Earth that threatens both his and Sydney's safety. Will William be able to complete his mission or will he choose love, sacrificing everything he stands for?
Sydney Elaine is just a small town girl waiting for life to start. Will she find love? Can she with any of the boys she's known her whole life? Then the earthquake happens, and strange things follow... like her grandmother taking in a strange boy stranded by a car accident. But, where are the friends he's supposed to have? Why don't they come back for him?
William Derry is from a distant star system and a bounty hunter sent to kill the star child. When his craft folds space, the Earth is shaken, and the small town of Madisonburg, Tennessee is rocked by the quake. When he shows up on Sydney's doorstep, she's instantly aware of him, even if his story sounds a little fishy.... I mean who ends up abandon by friends on a mountain road, without a cell phone or a change of clothes?
William finds himself attracted to the magnetic Sydney, with her internal warmth and humanity, both of which he has seldom experienced. Sydney also suffers from attraction, even if she shouldn't be.
Protostar by Braxton A. Cosby is a unique telling of star crossed lovers, separated by the wide expanse of space. When William finds Sydney, he becomes addicted to the star power that rests within her body, waiting to be discovered. It's warmth like he's never experience before. But, if he fails in his mission to kill the star child, he'll bring disgrace upon his family. It becomes an internal battle, torn between duty and desire. Sydney knows William is different, but she can't figure out how, and she wouldn't believe it anyway, until the dreams start. Could William be her destiny?
Protostar has loads of possibilities. It has an excellent storyline, characters that you want to get to know. But, there's also the trap that many new writers fall into, the curse of telling instead of showing. When I read a story, especially science fiction/fantasy, I want to feel the rumble of the engines vibrating beneath my feet as the craft roars through the soundless expanse of space. I don't need to know that the hull is white and the ship is an elongated shape of one kind or another, or the diameter, the internal workings. Let that come about through how someone else sees the craft, when someone else touches it icy exterior. If a character cries with the loss of a love, I want to feel the sadness. Telling slows the story down when it should be fast paced, as when the ship tears through space, folding it, shaking buildings apart the Earth's surface. I want to have to side step the rubble as it falls above my head. That's what this story is missing, as well as some addition editing to catch a few spelling errors, misuse of words, and grammatical errors. Also, this is a YA book (I read tons of YA), but the language felt somewhat stilted, unnatural, forced. I could see why William's speech patterns would have been stilted, he's an alien trying to fit in, but Sydney's speech pattern could be more natural, more teen like (not teen speak though, it ends up not sounding right) and toss away the thesaurus, the story will be better for it. I found myself trying to skim the first part of the story, or every time there was an over share of information, but I was afraid I'd miss a vital bit of information. It made the story slow reading, at least for this reviewer. See Amazon for more reviews. I think Braxton Cosby came up with a winner as far as the storyline goes, the cover art is beautifully eye catching and relates directly to the star child's story and the space hunters sent to find her. I'll look forward to the next in the series, but I do encourage additional editing. This could be a fantastic tale! Three out of five fairy kisses for this reader.
I received my review copy from the author, Braxton Cosby. A big thank you to Braxton!