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Tuesday, April 26, 2011

Sassy Sunday Story Starter.... from Sassy Brit 'Alternative-Read'

Okay.... this Sunday story starter is from Sassy Brit, not this week, but the week before. LOL I was ill and didn't even attempted it, but it kept sticking in the back of my mind. Amy Romine's story starter, Reality Sucks, just kept calling to me, and damn it, I finally gave in and an wrote a response. I couldn't help myself....

Reality Sucks
by:  Dottie Taylor
word count:  930

    “Of course, the hottest day of the summer,” Rachel took a sip of her beer leaning back into Ben’s chest.  Within the course of the conversation Rachel and Ben had become wrapped up within each other as she shifted from his leg to between his legs sharing the edge of the bar stool with him. Her back against his chest, his right arm on the bar and his left resting comfortably along her hip and waist. He hadn’t noticed until she turned to grab her cigarettes off the bar and the warmth that had encompassed him was gone and she was taking his hand pulling him off the stool.
    Waving the pack of cigarettes playfully in front of him, she smiled and he followed her out to the parking lot.
    “Fresh air…” she said twirling around in delight, she precariously lost her footing and he reached out catching her against him. 
    “Whoa, slow down, Ginger,” he said as she laughed against him.
    “You,” she said pointing at him playfully, “haven’t changed.”
    “And that is a bad thing,” he said with a smile handing her a lit cigarette.
    “I didn’t say that,” she replied taking a drag shifting her weight to lean against the wall of the building.
    “And you have?”
    “I don’t know, what do you think?”
    “I think we’ve all changed.”
    “That is an easy excuse.”
    “It’s not an excuse, it's reality.”
    “Yeah well…reality sucks.”
    “So what are we going to do about it then?”

     Ben shook his head at her, she knew his feelings, they'd been here before. He'd only returned for the funeral, not for her. As much as he would like to be attracted to her, he didn't work that way. It was fun to play, but when it came down to nuts and bolts, he needed something different.
     Still Rachel persisted. “Come on Ben, how do you know if you've never given it a try?”
     He laughed at her presumptions. “It isn't necessary to eat a pepper to know it's hot.”
    “Ah, but what if you'd never seen a pepper before?”
    “Then, sweetheart, I'd have a different tale to tell.” He smiled indulgently at her.
    “Come, lets have a few more drinks, I'm not nearly drunk enough yet.” She giggled as she grabbed his hand, leading him back to the bar.
    “Maybe, it's just me, but I think you've imbibed enough already.” But, he let her guide him back inside to reclaim their shared barstool.
   “Malcolm, we'll have some tequila I think.” She called as they returned.
   “Tequila? Are you trying to get me drunk?” Ben inquired, eyebrows raised.
   “Me? Would I do that?” She asked guilelessly.
   “I refer you back to our previous conversation.”
   The band entered and started to play some Emo-Screamo song, but with enough of a beat, that soon, Ben and Rachel were gyrating on the dance floor. The night grew warmer and drier. They danced and laughed, singing along when they could, twisting their bodies when they couldn't, getting drunker as the midnight came and went. When they were near to falling down, Malcolm called a cab, snuffing them inside with Rachel's address.
   When they arrived at the given address, the cabbie poured them into her ground floor apartment, where they continued to laugh and sing, peeling off shoes, jeans, shirts to drop on the floor. A trail led to the bed where they landed with a thud.
    Ben laid sideways on the bed, laughing as Rachel crawled over his body to the top of the bed, climbing inside the cool sheets. She crooked her finger, calling him to her.
    He shook his head, but followed her finger to climb inside the crisp sheets too.
    She ran her hand up and down the breath of his chest, teasing and touching as she brought her lips to caress his, her tongue tasting his mouth. He pulled away, “I'm sorry Rachel,” he said through the pounding of his heart, “I really wish I could....”
   “Shhhh....” she replied bringing her lips once more to his, “it's okay. We're just playing,” she grinned, and he made to push her away. “What? Are you afraid?”
    “Not afraid, but I don't want you to get the wrong idea.” He put a few inches between their bodies. 
    “Lets get some sleep, okay?” He smiled, brushing back the hair from his best friend's face.
    She faked a yawn, “sure....” and she again closed the distance between them.
   “Shhhh.... relax...” and she kissed him again, tongue probing and teasing.
    Ben had never slept with a woman before, knew he shouldn't be doing it now. It wasn't how he was put together. His heart pounded, what the hell was he doing? He thought about Kyle, trying to stop her seeking lips.
    “God, Rachel, I can't....” He closed his eyes. She kissed his lips once more, begging him with her eyes.
    His face burned with shame as he thought of Kyle, alone, waiting for him. Now he was completely sober, the effects of the tequila long forgotten.
    Ben pushed Rachel away. “I have to go.... we shouldn't have let it go this far....” suddenly, he felt ill. He groped around finding jeans and shirt, slipping into his clothing with hurried hands.
    Rachel listened as the front door latch closed. What had she done? Tried to sleep with her best friend, just to say she could? What did that say about her? She wanted to call out after him, tell him she was sorry, say it was the tequila, it wouldn't happen again. Christ, what was she thinking?
    Ben shivered as he walked back to the hotel. It was his fault, maybe he was questioning his sexuality? If there was one thing he did know, he felt unsatisfied, wished Kyle had come with him. He entered the suite to find a suitcase next to his
     “Hey,” Kyle called, “I got a few days off, decided to join you after all.” He stepped from the bedroom, and smiled at Ben. “Hope you don't mind?”
     Ben's eyes landed on Kyle, and he smiled. “No, this is just want I needed. I'm going to grab a shower, I'll join you in a minute.”
    In the shower, Ben washed away the alcohol and Rachel's scent. This is what he wanted, he was more sure of it than ever before. He rushed from the shower, exhausted from the days events. Funerals were always hard, add Rachel into the mix, and his day had been torture.
    Kyle leaned across, grazing his lips. “Long day?”
   “I can't even begin to tell you.” Ben smiled, “lets get some sleep.”
   Kyle reached over, brushing the length of Ben's body as he turned off the light. “Okay, it's been a long day for me too, the flight was hell.” But Ben's body responded instantly to Kyle's closeness. The night was going to grow longer, but they had tomorrow too.

Wellllll.... I've never written anything like this before.... hope it sounds okay.... lol, but this is where my thoughts led me when I saw the prompt....



Sassy Brit @ said...

Brilliant! Once again you really come up with a great story - and I am SO glad it called to you :) Can't wait to share this!

Hope you are feeling better now, last time we spoke you weren't too good.

I had major comp virus and was knocked out since Thursday trying to sort it out! Not funny at the time, but can laugh about it now.

Hugs, and thanks again for taking the time to join in.

Off to tell Amy! :) Tweet the world!

Amy J Romine said...

WOW! I have to say that was a surreal experience for me. First, your story was wonderful. It was original, honest, emotional but not too much. I really loved it.
The reason I am in awe is that it is so very different than anything I would have ever envisioned. The piece is from a book I am rewriting and having your fresh take on the characters is incredible.
Lastly, I am so flattered and honored that it called to you! As a fellow writer I know what that means and well it means so much!
Again, awesome, love it! You are very talented! Maybe someday I can show you who Rachel and Ben are in my head :0)

Unknown said...

Hi Sassy!

I really had fun with this, I rarely venture away from my first love, paranormal romance/urban fantasy. But... when I read this prompt, it kind of felt like Ben was reluctant. Since I haven't read Amy's book and didn't know the characters, I took what I say and ran with it, lol. This is a giant leap from my comfort zone....

I rarely write love scenes between men and women, so this was a stretch for me to consider a M/M (what I wrote of it anyway, lol). I knew this was where the story was leading me, and it wouldn't let me be until I actually put it into words, nudging me from the corner of my mind.

Thanks again for all the SSSSs you give us! They're so much fun to play with!

It sucks having a computer virus, which is why I have a Mac. I got tired of fighting Windows, fighting the hacks and the viruses. It was a little more money than I intended to spend, but what the hell, it was worth the money to save the headaches! LOL


Dottie :)

Unknown said...

Hi Amy!

Thanks for stopping by and for giving us the prompt (even if it was from two weeks ago.... sorry it took so long to post!).

I really enjoyed meeting your characters, Ben and Rachel, and throwing one of my own into the mix. I'm guessing Ben is not gay in your book, and Rachel loves him just the way he is. It's just when I read the prompt, I instantly felt Ben trying to escape from her tender trap, lol.

They're both likable characters, and as the author, it must be really weird to see your characters shown in a different light, completely different from how you know them. A stranger's view through different eyes.

This storyline is something I never would have thought to do, I rarely write romantic scenes between men and women, lol. But, it's good to stretch those creative muscles, shake out the kinks, try on something new.

Thanks again for the story starter!!


Dottie :)

Blodeuedd said...

Internet slow, me crazy...awesome story

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